Week 154 of #ThursThreads had some great tales. I'm honored to see all of the returning writers and read your stories. It was so nice to see so many of you this week and new folks. Welcome! Thank you for coming back again and again to write and for helping me celebrate these years of flash. Great thanks to Mellanie Szereto for judging this week. Be sure to check out the #ThursThreads #flashfiction group on FB to keep up with news, etc.
- Anna Lund | @AnnaLund2011
- Kelly Heinen | @Aightball
- Sandi Layne | @sandyquill
- Sheilagh Lee | @SweetSheil
- Silver James | @SilverJames_
- Jif Foam | @jif_foam
- Siobhan Muir | @SiobhanMuir
- Anne Chowdhury | @TwiAddictAnne
- L.T. Dalin | @LTDalin
- Bill Engleson
- Cate Derham | @Cate_Derham
- Charley Emma | @lindorfan
- Stacy Bennett | @SBennettwrites
- Louisa Bacio | @LouisaBacio
- David A. Ludwig | @DavidALudwig
- Eric Martell | @drmagoo
- Nellie Batz | @solimond
Silver James | @SilverJames_Mellanie says: Grammar and writing craft nerd that I am, I was immediately pulled into the scene by tight, succinct writing. Building tension hinted at a major conflict and plenty of action. Besides, wolves are sexy!
Bill EnglesonMellanie says: I love the story concept, which suggests lots of conflict and danger. The ending hook made me want to read more! Watch out for those distracting dialogue tags, though. They pulled me out of the scene a little bit.
Stacy Bennett | @SBennettwrites
Mellanie says: Good characterization and conflict drew me into the scene right away. A couple of dialogue tags stood out and interrupted the flow, but the immediacy of the tension pulled me back in.
Week 154 Winner
Mellanie says: Other than a misspelled word, the entry was clean and well-written. The scene opened and closed with good hooks, and the characters are compelling. Dialogue and actions are used very effectively for characterization and to show the dynamics of the relationship. Great job!
“That’s five hundred for me…, three, four, five, and three hundred for you.” I counted the bills out on the back of an overturned milk crate, used as a makeshift desk in my ‘office.’ “That makes us even.”
Tommy wasn’t great at math, but even someone of his limited mental powers could tell the difference between five and three. “How do you figure? I thought we were going halfsies.”
“Because it was my plan, and I’m the older one. I’ll get in more trouble if we get caught, so I get more of the money.”
I scooted over, putting my arm around his shoulders. “Big Tom,” I began, because he always loved to be called big. “What are you going to use the money for?”
The smile on his face was instantaneous. “A new bike! There’s a bright red one down at Old Man Johnson’s. It’s got white-wall’d triers and a silver horn that honks like a geese, and…”
“And how much is that bike?”
“Old Man Johnson wants twenty dollars for it, which is why mamma said no.”
“And now you have three hundred, and mamma can’t say nothin’ no more, can she? But I don’t need a twenty dollar bike, do I?”
Tommy smile vanished, and his head hung. “No. You need medicine, don’t you?”
“I do, and it’s super-important. Mamma didn’t understand that, but you do. So, are we square?”
Tommy hugged me. “We’re square.”
Poor kid. I probably should have only given him two hundred.
Congratulations SEVEN TIME WINNER Eric, Silver, Bill, and Stacy! Don't forget to claim your badges and display them with pride. You certainly earned it!
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